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Your acoustic intro sound pretty sweet. Nice use of effects and chords. A solid way to build some atmosphere.

"Build" seems pretty avarage to me.

Second intro is better, although I don´t like the palm mutings in the beginning of each riff.
PC ain´t very innovative as well, but I think it´s a way that never fails as bridge.

Chorus could have been cool, but I don´t like the chords in the second half. I think playing deeper E and C would have been better. Though it wouldn´t be pretty innovative as well :D

Transition into 2nd verse ain´t good. I like the lead guitar in this one.

I´m pretty confused by your bridge. Is it planed for vocals? Can´t say there´s anything catchy in this part. Instrumentally I can´t see any use in it.

Outro is better again. 115 - 119 are cool.

Globally I think your song lacks vocals. My final ratings will come soon.

Posted by Donkey of Steel  {{ 4 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 12 Nov 2009 05:01

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2 stars

Posted by Donkey of Steel  {{ 4 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 12 Nov 2009 05:30

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I think the intro guitar is really cool, the best part of your song, but I think when the slow drums enters, it loses strength. The staccato keys doesn´t fit for me, but the little guitar solo
fits a lot better. The verse riff is a little bit "strident", maybe more palm mute and some rests are needed. I motivate you to change the F#-A-C# chord in the chorus, it doesn´t hear good at all. I Actually liked the Bridge, but there is no transition to the PC :S
What i didn´t liked at all was the Breaking Down measure, i think is out of place. The outro idea is not bad, but the melodies and the repeated 8th notes I guess didn´t helped.

Maybe the lack of lyrics, as Donkey of Steel noticed, affected your song (I´ll say for bad).
But you have clearly the idea of a song structure, and actually made some good parts on it. Keep it on playing and writing music, ´cause what you´ve missed in this song can only be learned with a lot of practice in both things. By the Way, I really really congratulate for recording your stuff, that´s a really good habit.

1.5 Stars

Posted by Colochinni  {{ 4 tabs / 0 corrections }}  on: 15 Nov 2009 11:01

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